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2024년 4월 23일 1/50
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  • 250

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    ID : th***** 2024-04-23 00:03

    • I had a great time. I got on a cruise ship for a round trip in Han river. It took about 45 mins for one direction and considering its whole distance for returning, it took over 90 mins. It is always fun to challenge new things.
    원어민 강사 첨삭 2024-04-23 09:59
    • X: I had a great time. I got on a cruise ship for a round trip in Han river.
      O: I had a great time! I got on a cruise ship for a round trip on the Han River.

      X: It took about 45 mins for one direction and considering its whole distance for returning, it took over 90 mins.
      O: It took about 45 minutes in one direction, and considering the entire round trip, it took over 90 minutes.
      OR
      It takes approximately 45 minutes each way, so the round trip totals about 90 minutes

      X: It is always fun to challenge new things.
      O: It is always fun to try new activities.

      I had a great time! I got on a cruise ship for a round trip on the Han River. It took approximately 45 minutes each way, so the round trip totals about 90 minutes. It is always fun to try new activities.
  • 249

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    ID : th***** 2024-04-17 12:54

    • I began to have interest in Stock marketing. So, I like to watch finance programs and global news. It is really energetic each day and I feel alive when I focus on its fluctuations. I hope to be a investor like Yu Soojin. She is the best investor and she knows how to make momey by money through true investing.
    원어민 강사 첨삭 2024-04-17 16:29
    • (x) I began to have interest in Stock marketing.

      (o) I began to have an interest in Stock marketing.

      (x) So, I like to watch finance programs and global news.

      (o) Therefore, I enjoy watching finance programs and global news.

      (x) It is really energetic each day and I feel alive when I focus on its fluctuations.

      (o) Each day is truly energizing, and I feel alive when I focus on its fluctuations.

      (x) I hope to be a investor like Yu Soojin.

      (o) I hope to be an investor like Yu Soojin.

      (x) She is the best investor and she knows how to make momey by money through true investing.

      (o) She is the best investor and knows how to make money through true investing.

      FINAL:
      I began to have an interest in Stock marketing. Therefore, I enjoy watching finance programs and global news. Each day is truly energizing, and I feel alive when I focus on its fluctuations. I hope to be an investor like Yu Soojin. She is the best investor and knows how to make money through true investing.
  • 248

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    ID : th***** 2024-04-06 13:29

    • I was really shock to hear the news about the outbreak of the earthquake in Taiwan. So, I have been concerned about it since I couldn\'t keep in touch with my friends living in the place. I hope they are staying safe and doing well.
    원어민 강사 첨삭 2024-04-08 17:13
    • original text:

      I was really shock to hear the news about the outbreak of the earthquake in Taiwan.
      So, I have been concerned about it since I couldn\'t keep in touch with my friends
      living in the place. I hope they are staying safe and doing well.


      I was really shock to hear the news about the outbreak of the earthquake in Taiwan.(X)
      I was shocked to hear the news about the severely destructive earthquake in Taiwan. (V)


      So, I have been concerned about it since I couldn\'t keep in touch with my friends living in the place. (good)
      So, I have been concerned about it since I couldn\'t keep in touch with my friends living there. (better)


      Edited:

      I was shocked to hear the news about the severely destructive earthquake in Taiwan.
      So, I have been concerned about it since I couldn\'t keep in touch with my friends living there.
  • 247

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    ID : 2t**** 2024-04-04 12:29

    • When I am depressed, I share my problem with my friend and family.
      And than I can find the way how do i to solve that issue.
    원어민 강사 첨삭 2024-04-04 16:30
    • [x] When I am depressed, I share my problem with my friend and family.
      [o] When I am depressed, I share my problems with my friends and family.


      [x] And than I can find the way how do i to solve that issue.
      [o] Then, I can find a way to solve the issue.


      When I am depressed, I share my problems with my friends and family.
      Then, I can find a way to solve the issue.
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    ID : sc******** 2024-04-02 22:05

    • Hi. My name is Seungwan. You can just call me \"Son\". There are four of us in my family: My wife, my daughter, my son and me. I was born and raised in Gu-mi which is just outside of Dae-gu and I live in Gu-mi. I work as an aerospace engineer at the HS Corporation. I love my job because I get to see my favorite aircrafts everyday.
    원어민 강사 첨삭 2024-04-03 16:17
    • (x) You can just call me \"Son\".
      (o) You can just call me \"Son.\"

      (x) There are four of us in the family: My wife, my daughter, my son and me.
      (o) There are four of us in the family: my wife, my daughter, my son, and me.

      (x) I was born and raised in Gu-mi which is just outside of Dae-gu and I live in Gu-mi.
      (o) I was born and raised in Gu-mi, which is just outside of Dae-gu, and I live in Gu-mi.

      (x) I love my job because I get to see my favorite aircrafts everyday.
      (o) I love my job because I get to see my favorite aircraft every day.

      Hi. My name is Seungwan. You can just call me \"Son.\" There are four of us in the family: my wife, my daughter, my son, and me. I was born and raised in Gu-mi, which is just outside of Dae-gu, and I live in Gu-mi. I work as an aerospace engineer at the HS Corporation. I love my job because I get to see my favorite aircraft every day.