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영작 실력 업그레이드 시간 이거 맞아요? 틀려요?
실력있는 원어민 강사의 영어 첨삭 지도가 무료!
이제 한국식 영어 표현은 NO!
당신의 영작 실력을 업그레이드 해드립니다.
- 영어첨삭 지도는 본인이 직접 작문한 글만 첨삭이 가능합니다.
- ID당 1일 1회에 제한합니다. (하루 선착순 30명) 첨삭은 24시간 이내에 제공됩니다.
- 주제는 자유롭습니다.
(논문 등 전문적인 주제는 제외되며, 첨삭 내용은 모두 공개됩니다.)
2022년 8월 15일 0/30
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    ID : tls26* 2022-08-14 21:54

    • I read someone's writing that Jealousy starts from the thought that I'm supreior to someone or the thought that I could do someone's achievement like him or her.
      Jealosy can be someone's motivations by being competitive.
      However, Being jealous excessively can make you feel bad and could destroy your life.
      Thus, if you should compare yourself with others, when assessing yourself
      it's better to put all your feelings behind you.
  • 304

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    ID : tls26* 2022-08-12 21:03

    • Yesterday, After my teacher advised me to be careful of choices of my word, I googled to satisfy my curiosity.
      I learned the difference between professional knowledge and specific knowledge.
      Professional knowledge is the same with specialized knowledge.
      Specific knowledge is found by pursuing your genuine interests and innate talents.
      I understand it that is knowing oneself what abilities one have. Am I right?
      I’m sorry if I was rude by choosing wrong words and thank you for your understanding.
  • 303

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    ID : dudwk**** 2022-08-12 20:29

    • Last night , In my dream, My younger brother could come close to be the one of BTS members.
      That's ridiculous because BTS members starts their solo activities.
      Although it was a dream, it was quite a bummer that he lost his chance to be a superstar.
      It was nice to see BTS in my dream, though.
      I am not "army" who are fans of BTS, but I like them.
      There are rare opportunities to meet famous people in real life so I love that dream.
  • 302

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    ID : givem**** 2022-08-12 09:06

    • I was tossing and turning last night. It usually takes quite a long time to go into sleeping. And when I wake up in the middle of night, I can't fall asleep back. It seems like that it affects my immune system and physical health.
      I'm thinking that I'm going to a mental clinic. I get through the tough times these days because my husband is beside me. Being existence gives me energy to keep on. I am lucky to have him.
    원어민 강사 첨삭 2022-08-12 14:21
    • [x] It usually takes quite a long time to go into sleeping.
      [o] It usually takes quite a long time to go to sleep.

      [x] And when I wake up in the middle of night, I can't fall asleep back.
      [o] When I wake up in the middle of the night, I can't fall asleep.

      [x] It seems like that it affects my immune system and physical health.
      [o] It seems like it affects my immune system and physical health.

      [x] I'm thinking that I'm going to a mental clinic.
      [o] I'm thinking that I should go to a mental clinic.

      [x] Being existence gives me energy to keep on.
      [o] Being existent gives me the energy to keep on.



      I was tossing and turning last night.
      It usually takes quite a long time to go to sleep.
      When I wake up in the middle of the night, I can't fall asleep.
      It seems like it affects my immune system and physical health.
      I'm thinking that I should go to a mental clinic.
      I get through the tough times these days because my husband is beside me.
      Being existent gives me the energy to keep on.
      I am lucky to have him.
  • 301

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    ID : haida*** 2022-08-11 19:16

    • I don’t think watching shows at night is a good idea.
      First, sleeping late can make them feel tired during the day . They couldn’t focus the work they can make mistake easily.
      Second, human organs tend to working at night. If someone watch shows at night , it couldn’t work at night They physical condition is getting worse.
    원어민 강사 첨삭 2022-08-12 21:51
    • (o) I don’t think watching shows at night is a good idea.

      (x) First, sleeping late can make them feel tired during the day .

      (o) First, sleeping late can make us feel tired during the day.

      (x) They couldn’t focus the work they can make mistake easily.

      (o) We won't be able to focus at work and might commit mistakes easily.

      (x) Second, human organs tend to working at night.

      (o) Second, our organs tend to work at night.

      (x) If someone watch shows at night , it couldn’t work at night They physical condition is getting worse.

      (o) If someone watches shows at night, they won't be able to function well and will just worsen the condition of their bodies.

      I don’t think watching shows at night is a good idea. First, sleeping late can make us feel tired during the day. We won't be able to focus at work and might commit mistakes easily. Second, our organs tend to work at night. If someone watches shows at night, they won't be able to function well and will just worsen the condition of their bodies.